Your first cross is off to a good start. While the wire may be a bit much in the eyes of some, others may like it. Since you made it, it is up to you to determine if it is too cheesy or not but criticism from others is what makes us better at whatever we do.
The more you make the better you will get and remember time is of no importance unless you are under a deadline.
Personally, I would lose the wire.
The way I like a cross is not one that has perfect lines. It was an old rugged cross that started it all.
Mark <><